I kind of like it as is, really. Pretty sweet.

The lady-demon seems a little vague, I think I would probably have her head tilted back in the last panel.

Definitely shows promise- I like the backgrounds, which are simple but very defining; and I like the main character (especially in the last panel).

I like! Definitely a strong area for you.

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"An artist isn't someone who drags a brush across a canvas, or writes a song or dance or whatever. An artist is someone who comes back from a dream or a nightmare and tells us what they saw."
-Johnny X

thanks Bonnie, Yeah I was trying to go with a kind of Scottish banshee thing for the girl but I thought it looked a little sketchy too, and thanks for the tip I have trouble with drawing movement sometimes.

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Yeah, it's pretty hard! My best suggestion is to try to do the pose yourself- just to see if your bones will bend in that angle, etc.

I like the Scottish banshee idea... Now that I think about it, you wouldn't have to have solid lines for her clothes and body, you could do cross-hatching that sort of fades into background- just enough emphasis on a leg, a shoulder, ect., to show how she's moving but vague enough to be really ghostly. Her face and hands are definitely the most distinct part of her, the rest I think doesn't need to be as defined as the hero is.

I think if you're not really sure how to show it (especially in fantasy-type stuff) feel free to stylize it or just rely on suggestions (quick sketches instead of solid lines) and keep the emphasis on what you are sure of.

That was a bit wordier than I expected to be but I really like the idea and I think you can do a lot with these things.

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"An artist isn't someone who drags a brush across a canvas, or writes a song or dance or whatever. An artist is someone who comes back from a dream or a nightmare and tells us what they saw."
-Johnny X